I am a student at in Uru MÄnuka. In 2020 I was a year 7 and in 2021 I will be a year 8. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
Excellent opening sentence leading onto quite a complex plot. Good use of speech marks and punctuation in general. Movie trailer also creatively arouses interest. Have you been headhunted by any movie producers yet? (Maybe finish the whole story first).
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Excellent opening sentence leading onto quite a complex plot. Good use of speech marks and punctuation in general. Movie trailer also creatively arouses interest. Have you been headhunted by any movie producers yet? (Maybe finish the whole story first).
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